Wikipedia:Peer review/Alain Prost/archive1
Alain Prost[edit]
Alain hasn't really got the respect that I think he deserves in his F1 career - perhaps his unexcusible actions in Japan 1989 after he took out Ayrton Senna hasn't really help - Anyway back to the peer review - I've managed to sort out the article becauseit was ina complete mess when I saw it and now I think that I've revamped it. Take a look for yourself, here is the version before I started editing it: [1]. Anyway, can some people please tell me what else I need to do to get this to FA or GA and perhaps give me some sentences that I could source. Much appreciated. --Skully Collins Review Me! Please? 15:33, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
- Pretty good for the most part, a couple of comments:
- Subheadings seem overused. While FA Damon Hill uses a subheading for every season, the subsections there are generally more substantial. Single paragraph chunks of three or four lines break up the flow.
- The part about the rivalry with Senna should be converted into continuous prose rather than a bulleted list, and should be renamed to something like Rivalry with Ayrton Senna – the title of an article need not be included in section titles.
- There are a few instances where the prose is rather passive e.g. The half point was scored when the Monaco Grand Prix was stopped at half distance, meaning the top six drivers would only receive half scores could be The half point was scored when the Monaco Grand Prix was stopped at half distance, meaning the top six drivers only received half scores
- The section about Senna's death reads like an opinion piece or review, and is probably undue weight in an article about Prost.
- Large parts of the article are sparsely referenced. Taking the early life section as an example, breaking his nose and winning several karting championships are two things which ought to be referenced.
Hope this helps. Oldelpaso 00:00, 27 August 2006 (UTC)