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2008 Summer Olympics[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to take it to FAC

Thanks in advance, NickGibson3900 Talk 03:44, 29 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I suggest you directly take it to FAC since there is no response. But since I am here, I will just review a bit: "Media coverage" section, last paragraph, last sentence, I do not know whether the YouTube external links in the main text is appropriate. HYH.124 (talk) 09:19, 23 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Tag or talkback me if you require further peer reviews or a response from me. HYH.124 (talk) 09:19, 23 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Also, I noticed that citation 12 has its access date as "July 295, 2012". This obviously isn't right, so I looked back and found that it should be July 29 (no 5) and corrected it.
Be sure to check out the automated peer review as well. It commented about American vs. British English, citations after punctuation (such as "NOCs[b]," in the first paragraph of the lead - [b] should come after the comma), and some dead links in the references. Be sure those all get fixed before nominating for FA. http://dispenser.homenet.org/~dispenser/view/Peer_reviewer#page:2008_Summer_Olympics
Tonystewart14 (talk) 01:58, 24 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments (having stumbled here from my Peer Review)

  1. NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!
  2. Checklinks tool shows several problems throughout with dead links and slow links. I strongly suggest archiving as many as possible with added parameters archiveurl= and archivedate= with Internet Archive links.
  3. Uncited sentence at end of sect Olympic and world records.
  4. A few one-sentence-long-paragraphs and other short paragraphs throughout, you may wish to consider expanding and/or merging them up.
  5. Entire paragraph uncited at end of Venues sect. Including direct quotations uncited. That's a major issue.
  6. Remove hyperlink in direct body text in last paragraph of Media coverage sect, instead use a citation please.
  7. Consider moving portal links to bottom and using {{Portal bar}} and expanding with a few other additional relevant portals as well.
  8. First two notes, A and B, in Notes sect, are completely uncited. This is a major problem.
  9. Consider using less images in article. 13 total images used. That's a lot for an image reviewer to do a full thorough image review at FAC.
  10. NOTE: Please respond, below all my comments, and not interspersed throughout, thanks!

Hope that's helpful, and good luck! — Cirt (talk) 17:47, 25 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]