User:ObnoxiousAdri
 | This user is a student editor in Texas_AM/Technical_Editing_(Spring_2018). |
Good Articles vs. Needs Improvement[edit]
Crème brûlée[edit]
- Spelling of name is debated
- Lead could be expanded
- Order of topics is sufficient but could be tweaked
- Crema Catalan heading could be made into a subheading
- Necessity of ingredients list is questionable
- Could benefit from some copyediting
Xenophobia[edit]
- Strong focus on Jews
- Could benefit from a broader explanation
- Strong focus on discrimination
- Addition of concern towards maintaining culture could be added
- Could benefit from some copyediting
Choosing Articles to Work on[edit]
The following articles are my choices for possible projects.
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Forestry law[edit]
Write up the problem:[edit]
- Lead is not clear
- Does not adequately summarize contents
- Improper tone
- Written like an opinion essay
- Neutral point of view issues
- Lack of citations
- Structure
- Long paragraphs
- Headings are not clear
- No images
- See also section is lacking
- Context is not provided
- Jargon and technical wording
List your tasks:[edit]
- Ensure lead summarizes all of the content
- Remember to include changes on Environmental law
- Rewrite for tone
- Use formal language
- Correct to a neutral point of view
- Mark instances that need citations
- Improve structure
- Shorten/break up paragraphs
- Rename and organize headings
- Group together similar content
- Avoid redundancy across sections
- Include images
- Add articles to the See also section
- Provide context for the subject
- Use clear, precise, and accurate terms
- Ensure past Talk posts have been taken into consideration
- General copyediting
Frogger[edit]
Write up the problem:[edit]
- Lead is not clear
- Does not adequately summarize contents
- Uses technical wording
- Lack of citations
- Structure
- Organization is strange
- Headings are not clear
- Context is not provided
- Jargon and technical wording
List your tasks:[edit]
- Clarify lead
- Summarize all of the content
- Simplify and explain technical language
- Mark instances that need citations
- Improve structure
- Utilize structure from featured video game articles
- Rename and organize headings
- Group together similar content
- Avoid redundancy across sections
- Provide context
- Use clear, precise, and accurate terms
- Ensure past Talk posts have been taken into consideration
- General copyediting